"Forgive me if this feedback is a bit long, but I really wanted to take a good look at this piece for some time."

As the introduction begins, we readers are given a look into Mike’s psyche and how he feels about this dead-end job (figuratively & literally) as a nightwatchman. I can really sympathise with his situation getting horrible pay even though he deserves hazard wages, and I can relate as a normal guy just trying to stay afloat. Though how he’ll stay afloat on $120 for a week is anyone’s guess. He’d be better off searching through a trash dump.

You also add nice touches to the atmosphere with the gruesome fate of one worker and the description of this job, which on the surface would be dull and dry, but it becomes well known how tense the situation gets, as we read later. I can also really agree with Mike in wanting to kick his boss’s ass all over the place, as he sounds like a shit human being. Especially after the description of those animatronics…

Just a couple things I should point out in this creepily well-made note of this big indie game hit. First, “make ends meat” should be “meet”, and “there are” instead of “there’re” would just clean this up a bit, even though the last one isn’t exactly wrong... more that it's unheard of. Forgive me if that sounds pedantic.

Regardless, you did a fine job. I really don’t intend to play this game, and this note, for its creepy quality, gives me another good reason to stay away. Keep up the good work.